Communication 
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It was a dark cold day In the east sides the time was 9:00pm the weather was daul and misty day in the old town. The full moon was shining bright than ever. A old broke woman came out the shadows. The first thing she relised Was moon she look at the moon with a clueless face. she heard a mysterious voice the voice got louder . She walk towards the voice it was getting louder and louder than before. Then she finally got to the place.she finally got to the place were she heared voice was coming from. it wa near a she heared a terified screaming, she ran to the allies way but no one was there she look behind her and saw a mysterious man walk throught the strong mist up to the point the woman could see her again. walking in her head she was asking a lot of question “who was screaming who was that man”.
Tiannie,
I’m really intrigued by your personification of the moon. You have worked hard to show you understand the conventions of the genre and that you can create a sense of tension.
Where is the rest?
Read your work aloud when finished to see where you need to edit spelling and punctuation.